Conrad Rice

Well, I'm here to review, since you asked. You have what promises to be a very interesting story. But something seems a little off in this story. I'm going to ...

This is interesting. I'm going to go ahead and just critique this as it is, rather than as part of a novel, because in a novel chapters ought to be ...

Okay, this is going somewhere. Where that somewhere is, I'm not exactly sure. But I'll give this my best shot. There is one thing that I see sticking out in ...

Well, that was interesting, to say the least. You do have a thing for sad endings, J, I'll give you that. I don't know why you said once that you ...

Well, this was a good story. Not my cup of tea, but I know when something's good and it's still not my personal preference. I won't go after grammar, cause ...

This is a good story so far. It could do with a bit of expounding though. You go right from the main character walking in the woods to her seeing ...

Ah, the final piece. I should tell you I've really enjoyed reading all of these. It is a very vibrant world you have painted here. If you return to it ...

Well, this was a very interesting story. There's not a lot that I can find that might need fixing in this story. Description is one thing though. To me, this ...

A bit of dystopian satire, isn't this? Not that I mind, it is very well done. My first question is how does this connect to A Siren's Voicebox? I did ...

Doing good here so far. I thought that Arnold's conversation with his alarm clock was hilarious and well done, though you might have him wonder if he is insane a ...

Good so far. I thought that your dialogue was superb, but maybe a little long. Maybe consider clipping it for length. Your descriptions were very well done. You showed us ...

Alright. So far, this is a good story. I'll touch on the three things you wanted first, then some other things that I noticed. Dialogue comes first. You tried to ...

I found this to be a very interesting and unique piece, poetic in a sense. There's not much that I see wrong here. However, what interests me is the main ...

This was a good, heart touching story. That being said, there are a few things in there that might need to be addressed. First off, I kind of get the ...

This is a decent story, and has a lot of potential to become a good one. That being said, there are some things that need to be worked on before ...